Indeed.
Also, don't forget to actually submit the new version.
Why just that stuff?
It's not just those few things I mentioned. I went through the whole script and I found a number of grammar and spelling issues throughout it. For example, there are 2 in the first sentence alone.JINXED wrote: ↑Wed Feb 21, 2018 10:49 pmWhat do you mean ? I've used everything that you fixed and gave me I didnt leave anything out it just in the past you told some problems about my script and i used what you gave me after you fixed it i was just including some of the few things i had to fix that you mentioned to show you i was doing what you said unless i forgot a part then im sorry i didnt mean to offend
When it should be:Elica is a elf who works as a maid in the Wild Boar Traven.
Lol I'd start by at least waiting a few more days. Voting hasn't even been open for 24 hours yet and maximum of 11 (at the time of writing) people have voted and we know from the last vote that there are at least 95ish members. Remember how I was as high as 4th or 5th place at the start of the last vote before dropping down to 10th at the end. So anything can happen at this point.JINXED wrote: ↑Thu Feb 22, 2018 12:03 amOK so looks like i'm not gonna win this time but that's no problem i'm not gonna give it up but i'm kind upset on what I'm doing wrong ? Is it the character design or the story plot, maybe the sex scenes aren't erotic enough ? do i need to add some fetish ? Or maybe its the something else i'm not seeing i don't know but 'm not gonna give up on this story cause i know this story can be a classic story right next to officer juggs and more . i know i'm new to this writing a script stuff just need time and patience to get a winning story bit i gotta have some sort incite on what people like here cause to my oppion i realy hate the whole machine sex thing seem bland to me